高中英语写作范文及点评

范文讲评：旅游事业

「要求」

要求：旅游事业对我国具有举足轻重的作用。请以Ways to Improve China’s Tourism为题为我国旅游事业的发展提几点建议。（提示：扩大宣传，改善旅游设施，提高服务质量 ） 「范文」

Ways to Improve china’s tourism

Tourism is now becoming a major industry throughout the world. However，tourism in China is not as developed as it should be. If the following is done，China’s tourism will definitely be improved.

First，our places of interest should be better advertised throughout the world to attract more tourists. Second，facilities should be provided to ensure that tourists enjoy their trip. Finally，the quality of service should be improved.

Don’t tell people their ideas are bad unless you’ve got a good one.

「评语」

本文第一段提出问题，第二段解决问题，“first”，“second”，“finally”等词的使用，使整篇文章条理格外清晰。

范文讲评：如何利用空余时间

「要求」

题目：你将参加校园英语讲演比赛。现在需要写出一份简要的底稿，底稿应包含以下基本要点。

随着工作时间的缩短，空余时间越来越多了。 如何利用空余时间。 利用空余时间的益处。 题目自拟。

「范文」

Use of Free Time

Some people may be so busy that they never have a spare moment，but it would be hard to find such people in contemporary times. Working hours are shorter and vacations longer，and there are more and more ways to spend the weekends. Aside from eating and sleeping，what do people do during the many hours when they are not at work or at school？

Use of free time often discloses much about one’s tastes，values，interests and personality. What may be one man’s leisure，however，might be another man’s work. In leisure hours，some may turn to the humanities：literature，magic，art and here we might also mention movies and television. Others participate in sports，politics，voluntary work or hobbies at home. Still others like parties，travelling，or just loafing.

Obviously，the use of free time is a good means of relaxation，but its benefits go beyond this. All things people do in leisure hours enable them to gratify their wishes. This can contribute to intellectual growth and promote social activities as well.

So the good use of free time will make life rich，colorful and rewarding.

「评语」

这篇文章写得很有水平。说理深入浅出，语言丰富晓畅，例证详实，句式灵活多变，使得文章生动并吸引人。开篇用问句，引出下文；结尾点题，总结全文。并且很有文学性。